What do you think of my book?

Here’s a book that I began writing. Please tell me what you think, anything I should change or add and any grammar mistakes i have made. Thanks :)

Prologue

Nurse Jane walked into the hospital room to check on the twin brother and sister who had just been born. Jane was used to caring for twins, but what the doctor hadn’t told her was that the parents of the twins were teenagers, no older than 18. Jane felt sorry for the couple, they had no one there supporting them, no friends or parents. But there was something different about these parents, Jane couldn’t quite put her finger on it, she just knew they were special.
“How are you doing?” Jane asked the man. She looked at the thin file the doctor had given her. The man’s name was Zepp Chain and the woman was named Airan Gloss.
“We’re doing fine,” Zepp said, smiling down at the mother, who lay in the hospital bed, the blue covers draped around her thin body. Zepp had the girl cradled in his strong arms and Airan held the boy. The boy had thick, dark brown hair and eyes, just like his father, Jane noted. The girl had little hair on her head, but it was definitely blond, unlike her mother who was a redhead. As Jane looked closely at the baby girl, she noticed she had mesmerizing purple eyes, which were mirror images of her mother‘s eyes.
“May I see him?” Jane asked. Airan handed her his son and she cradled him in her arms. She began making faces and talking in a high pitched voice, making her self look like a fool. The baby put his small arms in the air and yawned. Jane noticed a black mark on the underside of the boy’s wrist. It was much like a tattoo and was in the shape of a sun, the rays curling off the perfect circle. What an unusual birthmark, Jane thought.
Crash! Jane whipped around, startled. Shards of glass rained onto the ground from the broken window, a man had jumped in. He wore all black, and he closely resembled Zepp. He wore gloves and held a javelin in his hands. Jane tried to run out of the room, but the man threw his javelin and volts of electricity shot through her body and she fell to the ground almost immediately, barely alive. The baby boy fell to the ground, completely unphased. Larken reached over and picked up the boy.
“Larken!” Zepp hissed.
“How are we today, little brother?” Larken said, picking up his javelin and pointing it at Airan. He pulled his arm back and threw the javelin. There was no need to aim, the weapon always hit it’s mark. It was a gift from Phaeton, his leader. Zepp ran over to Airan and softly stroked her face. She wasn’t dead yet, she could still live.
“Why are you here?” Zepp asked, tears rolling down his cheeks, which had been cut with glass from the broken window.
“Phaeton’s orders. You know how the Shining One hates it when we disobey him,” Larken said coldly. Larken moved forward and punched Zepp in the face. Zepp staggered backwards and fell into a chair, the girl still in his arms. He quickly got up and ran to the window. Zepp threw his baby girl out the window, it was the only chance she had of survival, if Larken got a hold of her, he would kill her instantly. Zepp knew the girl would live, her instincts would surely kick in.
Larken ran over to Zepp, fury etched on his face. Zepp tried desperately to get up and run, to save his son. But Larken, always having been stronger, pinned Zepp to the ground. Larken’s fists curled into a ball and he punched Zepp in the face. Zepp screamed in pain and tried to fight back, but Larken won out. He grabbed the baby, who was wailing as loudly as possible.
“Give him back!” Zepp managed to get out through his mangled jaw, the bones crushed from the impact of Larken’s fist. Hundreds of years of training had gotten Larken very strong.
Zepp jumped up and kicked Larken in the stomach. But Larken hadn’t felt anything, it was like a Zepp‘s fist had the power of a house fly. Zepp hadn’t trained in years, and had lost a lot of the strength he had had when he was younger.
“Ha! You think you can overpower me!” Larken sneered. “I will always be better than you, little brother!”
Larken then kicked Zepp in the head twice, knocking him unconscious. The baby continued to wail, as if it knew it had lost the only people in the world who would ever love him.
Larken picked up Zepp’s body and slumped him over his shoulder. Larken carefully held the baby in his arms, if anything happened to him Phaeton would surely kill him. Larken jumped back out the window and jumped into the open air outside. The sky seemed to open up, then sucked Larken into it.
***
The baby girl plunged down the twelve stories to the ground, but at the last moment transformed. She was a blue jay, flying high into the sky. Her wings were spread wide, a light blue with white tips. Snow fell all around her, cold on her feathers. She joyfully flew all around town, but finally got tired and landed softly on the ground below. And then she was a girl again, and had forgotten everything

Hi! I think I read this yesterday……. anyways, yes, it’s a cool idea/story. It sorta sounds like jumper, but not exactly. I warn you: there are lots of ideas close to this, so you’ll have to make this pretty unique if you want it published. Maybe morph one of your other ideas into this story to make it more interesting, or make the story in the 1860’s during the civil war, and the girl enters the army for the confederates or something. That idea is a little out there, but just to get you thinking.

hope this helped,
Christine

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I think I may be having twins, this stems from my original question and I would just like to know if anyone has had hidden twins recently, that were not caught until delivery. I would just like sombody elses opinions, and if you have had hidden twins, what was your pregnancy like. Thanks

Samantha, that’s not what she was asking. What she meant (I think) is was there anyone who didn’t know they were having twins until delivery. A second baby that wasn’t found on ultrasound.

I am pregnant and wondering if it’s twins as well. The doctor thinks there is a chance and I go next week for another ultrasound to see if they can find a second one. I wouldn’t be surprised, it’s just a feeling.

I don’t know anyone personally that this has happened to but I’ve heard stories….You just never know.

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What do you think of my story?

Here it is…any suggestions or criticism is welcome This is only the prologue.

Prologue

Nurse Jane walked into the hospital room to check on the twin brother and sister who had just been born. Jane was used to caring for twins, but what the doctor hadn’t told her was that the parents of the twins were teenagers, no older than 18. Jane felt sorry for the couple, they had no one there supporting them, no friends or parents.
“How are you doing?” Jane asked the man. She looked at the file the doctor had given her. The man’s name was Zepp Chain and the woman was named Airan Gloss.
“We’re doing fine,” Zepp said, smiling down at the mother, who lay in the bed. Zepp had the girl cradled in his arms and Airan held the boy. The boy had thick, dark brown hair and eyes, just like his father, Jane noted. The girl had little hair on her head, but it was definitely blond, unlike her mother who was a redhead. As Jane looked closely at the baby girl, she noticed she had mesmerizing purple eyes, which were mirror images of her mother‘s eyes.
“May I see him?” Jane asked. Airan handed her his son and she cradled him in her arms. She began making faces and talking in a high pitched voice, making her self look like a fool. The baby put his arms in the air and yawned. Jane noticed a black mark on the underside of the boy’s wrist. It was much like a tattoo and was in the shape of a sun. What an unusual birthmark, Jane thought.
Crash! Jane turned around. Shards of glass rained onto the ground from the broken window, a man had jumped in. He wore all black, and he closely resembled Zepp. He wore gloves and held a javelin in his hands. Jane tried to run out of the room, but the man threw his javelin and volts of electricity shot through her body and she fell to the ground almost immediately. The baby boy fell to the ground, completely unphased. Larken reached over and picked up the boy.
“Larken!” Zepp hissed.
“How are we today, little brother?” Larken said, picking up his javelin and pointing it at Airan. He pulled his arm back and threw the javelin. There was no need to aim, the weapon always hit it’s mark. It was a gift from Phaeton, his leader.
“Why are you here?” Zepp asked, tears rolling down his cheeks.
“Adymus’s orders. You know how he hates it when we disobey him,” Larken said evilly. Larken moved forward and punched Zepp in the face. Zepp staggered backwards and fell into a chair, the girl still in his arms. He quickly got up and ran to the window. Zepp threw his baby girl out the window, it was the only chance she had of survival, if Larken got a hold of her, he would kill her instantly.
Larken punched Zepp in the face again and then kicked him in the knee. Zepp fell to the ground. Larken kicked him in the head, and he became unconscious.
***
The baby girl fell to the ground, but at the last moment transformed. She was a blue jay, flying high into the sky. She flew all around town, but finally got tired and landed softly on the ground. And then she was a girl again, and had forgotten everything that had just happened.
A man wandered up the street, as he was buying a soda from the machine, he noticed the baby laying on the sidewalk. She was wrapped in a pink blanket and had dark purple eyes. Puzzled, he went over and picked the baby up. There was no one else around, it was three in the morning, after all. The man figured the baby had been abandoned and left to die.
The man, called Frank, new of an orphanage in the center of town. He took the girl there, hoping her life would be safe from then on. But, unfortunately, life will never be safe for a Shifter.

Thanks for reading :)
ooo it sounds good! i want to red more. lol. seriously, i loved it! :D
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20100310134717AAHAAk9 please

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The next thing you should think about is the floor. Wood floors are gorgeous but they can be cold. Little ones can fall down and get hurt easier than with carpeting also. The nursery is one room where it is probably best to have thick wall-to-wall carpeting installed. You will want to find one that cleans easily, as it is sure to get dirty.

After the flooring and walls are set, you need to think about the type of furniture that will look best in the room. Baby furniture is often white but black baby furniture makes a nice choice as well. It will match with anything, it can be used for either sex and it will be easier to clean.

A convertible crib is really convenient piece of furniture to purchase. It can be changed as your baby grows and his or her needs change as well. When your child gets old enough, it can easily be turned into a bed.

It is a smart idea to get all the bedroom furniture you need at once. Other pieces might include a dresser and perhaps a desk with a chair. Although it will be a while, eventually your child will need a desk. Buying everything at once ensures that you they all match. You can complete the set with a bookcase, night table and toy chest.

If you live in a home that is older and becomes drafty, you may want home space heaters. You probably will not want to keep it on all the time. But you can get the room warmed up for baby before bedtime.

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There are quite a few options available these days that do not burn a hole in your pocket. Although a point to be remembered is that the games should be chosen with discretion as not all games are advisable for young children. Make sure that the age bar specified on the box includes the age group of your children.

There are many good video games for family such as follows:

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Peggle Nights is a puzzle meant for parents and very young children where they have a fun time aiming and shooting popping characters with metal balls.

Lego Star Wars involves two of the legendary characters - Lego and Star Wars are paired together in one of the coolest games that can be enjoyed both by parents as well as children.

Sports games are all sports games as it lets them pick their favourite players and sports teams and get a life-like experience. Again, the difficulty levels can be adjusted and games such as NBA Street V3, Winning Eleven 8, and Madden etc can be played by parents and kids.

The Beatles: Rock Band - the name itself sounds fun! In this video game, music and excitement comes together and gives your entire family double the fun! Each of your family members can choose different musical instrument and sing along using special controllers.

Okami promises a unique gaming experience for the whole family with innovative graphics, characters and the concept.

Instead of resorting to television shows or loony cartoon characters, why not spend some quality time with your children? Leaving your children with video games may keep them busy but will prevent you from making any conversation and catching up with them. Dear Parents, Choose from a wide range of good video game to play with your kids and make fun with your family.

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Another problem that will occur in a manic episode will not look like happy behavior. The person will be extremely aggressive and provoking. They will look extremely impertinent or annoyed.

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Ok thank you so much…I did get that number and left a message and will definitely call them again Monday (and again and again till they answer and help me…lol) I was so freaked out about them saying it was already direct deposited and figured it meant to him….whew….THANKS SO MUCH!!!

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