Here’s a book that I began writing. Please tell me what you think, anything I should change or add and any grammar mistakes i have made. Thanks

Prologue

Nurse Jane walked into the hospital room to check on the twin brother and sister who had just been born. Jane was used to caring for twins, but what the doctor hadn’t told her was that the parents of the twins were teenagers, no older than 18. Jane felt sorry for the couple, they had no one there supporting them, no friends or parents. But there was something different about these parents, Jane couldn’t quite put her finger on it, she just knew they were special.
“How are you doing?” Jane asked the man. She looked at the thin file the doctor had given her. The man’s name was Zepp Chain and the woman was named Airan Gloss.
“We’re doing fine,” Zepp said, smiling down at the mother, who lay in the hospital bed, the blue covers draped around her thin body. Zepp had the girl cradled in his strong arms and Airan held the boy. The boy had thick, dark brown hair and eyes, just like his father, Jane noted. The girl had little hair on her head, but it was definitely blond, unlike her mother who was a redhead. As Jane looked closely at the baby girl, she noticed she had mesmerizing purple eyes, which were mirror images of her mother‘s eyes.
“May I see him?” Jane asked. Airan handed her his son and she cradled him in her arms. She began making faces and talking in a high pitched voice, making her self look like a fool. The baby put his small arms in the air and yawned. Jane noticed a black mark on the underside of the boy’s wrist. It was much like a tattoo and was in the shape of a sun, the rays curling off the perfect circle. What an unusual birthmark, Jane thought.
Crash! Jane whipped around, startled. Shards of glass rained onto the ground from the broken window, a man had jumped in. He wore all black, and he closely resembled Zepp. He wore gloves and held a javelin in his hands. Jane tried to run out of the room, but the man threw his javelin and volts of electricity shot through her body and she fell to the ground almost immediately, barely alive. The baby boy fell to the ground, completely unphased. Larken reached over and picked up the boy.
“Larken!” Zepp hissed.
“How are we today, little brother?” Larken said, picking up his javelin and pointing it at Airan. He pulled his arm back and threw the javelin. There was no need to aim, the weapon always hit it’s mark. It was a gift from Phaeton, his leader. Zepp ran over to Airan and softly stroked her face. She wasn’t dead yet, she could still live.
“Why are you here?” Zepp asked, tears rolling down his cheeks, which had been cut with glass from the broken window.
“Phaeton’s orders. You know how the Shining One hates it when we disobey him,” Larken said coldly. Larken moved forward and punched Zepp in the face. Zepp staggered backwards and fell into a chair, the girl still in his arms. He quickly got up and ran to the window. Zepp threw his baby girl out the window, it was the only chance she had of survival, if Larken got a hold of her, he would kill her instantly. Zepp knew the girl would live, her instincts would surely kick in.
Larken ran over to Zepp, fury etched on his face. Zepp tried desperately to get up and run, to save his son. But Larken, always having been stronger, pinned Zepp to the ground. Larken’s fists curled into a ball and he punched Zepp in the face. Zepp screamed in pain and tried to fight back, but Larken won out. He grabbed the baby, who was wailing as loudly as possible.
“Give him back!” Zepp managed to get out through his mangled jaw, the bones crushed from the impact of Larken’s fist. Hundreds of years of training had gotten Larken very strong.
Zepp jumped up and kicked Larken in the stomach. But Larken hadn’t felt anything, it was like a Zepp‘s fist had the power of a house fly. Zepp hadn’t trained in years, and had lost a lot of the strength he had had when he was younger.
“Ha! You think you can overpower me!” Larken sneered. “I will always be better than you, little brother!”
Larken then kicked Zepp in the head twice, knocking him unconscious. The baby continued to wail, as if it knew it had lost the only people in the world who would ever love him.
Larken picked up Zepp’s body and slumped him over his shoulder. Larken carefully held the baby in his arms, if anything happened to him Phaeton would surely kill him. Larken jumped back out the window and jumped into the open air outside. The sky seemed to open up, then sucked Larken into it.
***
The baby girl plunged down the twelve stories to the ground, but at the last moment transformed. She was a blue jay, flying high into the sky. Her wings were spread wide, a light blue with white tips. Snow fell all around her, cold on her feathers. She joyfully flew all around town, but finally got tired and landed softly on the ground below. And then she was a girl again, and had forgotten everything

Hi! I think I read this yesterday……. anyways, yes, it’s a cool idea/story. It sorta sounds like jumper, but not exactly. I warn you: there are lots of ideas close to this, so you’ll have to make this pretty unique if you want it published. Maybe morph one of your other ideas into this story to make it more interesting, or make the story in the 1860’s during the civil war, and the girl enters the army for the confederates or something. That idea is a little out there, but just to get you thinking.

hope this helped,
Christine

I think I may be having twins, this stems from my original question and I would just like to know if anyone has had hidden twins recently, that were not caught until delivery. I would just like sombody elses opinions, and if you have had hidden twins, what was your pregnancy like. Thanks

Samantha, that’s not what she was asking. What she meant (I think) is was there anyone who didn’t know they were having twins until delivery. A second baby that wasn’t found on ultrasound.

I am pregnant and wondering if it’s twins as well. The doctor thinks there is a chance and I go next week for another ultrasound to see if they can find a second one. I wouldn’t be surprised, it’s just a feeling.

I don’t know anyone personally that this has happened to but I’ve heard stories….You just never know.

Here it is…any suggestions or criticism is welcome This is only the prologue.

Prologue

Nurse Jane walked into the hospital room to check on the twin brother and sister who had just been born. Jane was used to caring for twins, but what the doctor hadn’t told her was that the parents of the twins were teenagers, no older than 18. Jane felt sorry for the couple, they had no one there supporting them, no friends or parents.
“How are you doing?” Jane asked the man. She looked at the file the doctor had given her. The man’s name was Zepp Chain and the woman was named Airan Gloss.
“We’re doing fine,” Zepp said, smiling down at the mother, who lay in the bed. Zepp had the girl cradled in his arms and Airan held the boy. The boy had thick, dark brown hair and eyes, just like his father, Jane noted. The girl had little hair on her head, but it was definitely blond, unlike her mother who was a redhead. As Jane looked closely at the baby girl, she noticed she had mesmerizing purple eyes, which were mirror images of her mother‘s eyes.
“May I see him?” Jane asked. Airan handed her his son and she cradled him in her arms. She began making faces and talking in a high pitched voice, making her self look like a fool. The baby put his arms in the air and yawned. Jane noticed a black mark on the underside of the boy’s wrist. It was much like a tattoo and was in the shape of a sun. What an unusual birthmark, Jane thought.
Crash! Jane turned around. Shards of glass rained onto the ground from the broken window, a man had jumped in. He wore all black, and he closely resembled Zepp. He wore gloves and held a javelin in his hands. Jane tried to run out of the room, but the man threw his javelin and volts of electricity shot through her body and she fell to the ground almost immediately. The baby boy fell to the ground, completely unphased. Larken reached over and picked up the boy.
“Larken!” Zepp hissed.
“How are we today, little brother?” Larken said, picking up his javelin and pointing it at Airan. He pulled his arm back and threw the javelin. There was no need to aim, the weapon always hit it’s mark. It was a gift from Phaeton, his leader.
“Why are you here?” Zepp asked, tears rolling down his cheeks.
“Adymus’s orders. You know how he hates it when we disobey him,” Larken said evilly. Larken moved forward and punched Zepp in the face. Zepp staggered backwards and fell into a chair, the girl still in his arms. He quickly got up and ran to the window. Zepp threw his baby girl out the window, it was the only chance she had of survival, if Larken got a hold of her, he would kill her instantly.
Larken punched Zepp in the face again and then kicked him in the knee. Zepp fell to the ground. Larken kicked him in the head, and he became unconscious.
***
The baby girl fell to the ground, but at the last moment transformed. She was a blue jay, flying high into the sky. She flew all around town, but finally got tired and landed softly on the ground. And then she was a girl again, and had forgotten everything that had just happened.
A man wandered up the street, as he was buying a soda from the machine, he noticed the baby laying on the sidewalk. She was wrapped in a pink blanket and had dark purple eyes. Puzzled, he went over and picked the baby up. There was no one else around, it was three in the morning, after all. The man figured the baby had been abandoned and left to die.
The man, called Frank, new of an orphanage in the center of town. He took the girl there, hoping her life would be safe from then on. But, unfortunately, life will never be safe for a Shifter.

Thanks for reading
ooo it sounds good! i want to red more. lol. seriously, i loved it!
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When you are expecting a new addition to the family, there is a lot to consider when creating the nursery. Designing it can be enjoyable if you can keep yourself from getting stressed. It is the perfect place to direct all that anticipation you have while waiting for your baby to be born.

One of the first considerations is whether to wallpaper or not to wallpaper. There are many really cute designs available. But painting is a lot easier to do and easier to change later on down the line. If you want to add some flair, you can stencil in a border. Put up paintings or some wall hangings and you are done.

The next thing you should think about is the floor. Wood floors are gorgeous but they can be cold. Little ones can fall down and get hurt easier than with carpeting also. The nursery is one room where it is probably best to have thick wall-to-wall carpeting installed. You will want to find one that cleans easily, as it is sure to get dirty.

After the flooring and walls are set, you need to think about the type of furniture that will look best in the room. Baby furniture is often white but black baby furniture makes a nice choice as well. It will match with anything, it can be used for either sex and it will be easier to clean.

A convertible crib is really convenient piece of furniture to purchase. It can be changed as your baby grows and his or her needs change as well. When your child gets old enough, it can easily be turned into a bed.

It is a smart idea to get all the bedroom furniture you need at once. Other pieces might include a dresser and perhaps a desk with a chair. Although it will be a while, eventually your child will need a desk. Buying everything at once ensures that you they all match. You can complete the set with a bookcase, night table and toy chest.

If you live in a home that is older and becomes drafty, you may want home space heaters. You probably will not want to keep it on all the time. But you can get the room warmed up for baby before bedtime.

Go to a home improvement store this weekend and spend a little time there. You are sure to get many ideas by walking down the aisles. Start thinking about it early so you can really enjoy the entire process of preparing a new home for your baby.

Are you running out of ideas to do something fun on the weekend? There are many good video games for family to enjoy together! Since video games can be expensive if bought for a different member of the family. Why not bring something the whole family can play together?

There are quite a few options available these days that do not burn a hole in your pocket. Although a point to be remembered is that the games should be chosen with discretion as not all games are advisable for young children. Make sure that the age bar specified on the box includes the age group of your children.

There are many good video games for family such as follows:

World of Goo is a good family game which is known to be educational as well as innovative. The game is built around collecting balls and building structures with them. Young children may require some help with this game therefore parents will also enjoy this game assisting their children.

Peggle Nights is a puzzle meant for parents and very young children where they have a fun time aiming and shooting popping characters with metal balls.

Lego Star Wars involves two of the legendary characters - Lego and Star Wars are paired together in one of the coolest games that can be enjoyed both by parents as well as children.

Sports games are all sports games as it lets them pick their favourite players and sports teams and get a life-like experience. Again, the difficulty levels can be adjusted and games such as NBA Street V3, Winning Eleven 8, and Madden etc can be played by parents and kids.

The Beatles: Rock Band - the name itself sounds fun! In this video game, music and excitement comes together and gives your entire family double the fun! Each of your family members can choose different musical instrument and sing along using special controllers.

Okami promises a unique gaming experience for the whole family with innovative graphics, characters and the concept.

Instead of resorting to television shows or loony cartoon characters, why not spend some quality time with your children? Leaving your children with video games may keep them busy but will prevent you from making any conversation and catching up with them. Dear Parents, Choose from a wide range of good video game to play with your kids and make fun with your family.

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The symptoms of bipolar are divided into two groups; they are manic and depressive. People with bipolar disorder are going to suffer both groups of symptoms.

Mania

Mania is the high point of bipolar symptoms . With mania the person is feeling high. They are happy and feeling like they are on top of the world.

However, the main point of mania is that the person is not only pleased, but glad in the extreme. All symptoms of a person actually has in a manic episode is pushed to the extreme that is why it’s regarded as a mania, not just simply be happy.

The other trouble with the manic episode is that because of the extreme high, the person may tend to do something spontaneously, and cannot control their behavior. A lot of people during this episode will feel like they’re unbeatable.

Another problem that will occur in a manic episode will not look like happy behavior. The person will be extremely aggressive and provoking. They will look extremely impertinent or annoyed.

Symptoms of bipolar (manic episode) include:

• Very confident
• Irritable
• High energy
• No require to sleep
• Unrealistic thoughts
• High self-esteem
• Fast speech
• Very active
• Incapable to focus
• Restlessness
• Irresponsible behavior

Depression

Another kind of episode suffered by a person suffering from bipolar disorder is depressive episode. Totally the opposite of mania, depression brings about someone to feel extremely weak. The person may feel very sad and low.

They may start to feel like their life is worthless. A depressive episode can lead to suicidal thoughts and actions.

The depressive episode is frequently more dangerous than the manic episode. This episode is almost always treated with the medication due to this reality.

The standard medications, though, used to treat depression frequently don’t work for bipolar depression and in fact will make it worse. Someone suffering from bipolar depressive episode usually will move slowly and begin to act extremely different than a person that is simply suffering from depression.

Depression bipolar symptoms:

• Feeling blameworthy
• Very sorrow
• Moving and talking slowly
• Always sleeping
• Extreme changes in eating habits
• Feeling of emptiness
• Sluggishness

It is important not to ignore the signs of bipolar disorder. The symptoms of bipolar are the first sign that something is wrong and the first opportunity for someone to get help and treatment.

I’m an Aunt of four children two girls ages 15, 13, and twin boys age 10. Their mother (my sister) is addicted to Meth. The fathers have abandoned them as babies and have never been a part of their lives. Currently they have been living with their grandparents (my parents) but in a very cramped living situation. There is only one bed and the other three switch off sleeping on the floor. My parents are doing their best, but unfortunately it’s not an ideal situation. I have two younger sisters that still live at home with my parents so currently there are 8 people living under one roof. I know the children are stressed and have had a tendency to act out. I’ve been searching all over the web to try to find some sort of help for them. Most of what I’m finding is geared towards teens with addictions. Fortunately for them they have refrained from using but as my nieces get older I am fearful if they don’t get some counseling or additional support they will follow down their mothers same path. They need help before it’s too late!

if your parents are addicted you got it easy you could do what ever u wanted, u lucky mofo

The most difficult decision i ever had to make was whether or not to tell my parents about my twin brother Ryan’s drug problem. I vowed to him i wouldnt tell them, but that was when he was just casually doing it at parties, it had gotten out of control since then and he was becoming addicted extremely fast. Me and him had always been close as we were twins, and he hated me for telling them. I began to hate myself too because i knew i let him down. He ended up getting the help he needed with his family there to support him. (there is 5 siblings so a lot of support). In the end he realized i made the decision because i loved him and didnt want anything to happen to him, but i always wonder if i made the right decision because i let down the one person i knew i could trust and it was the same thing for him with me and i blew it.
In case you were wondering Ryan is almost complete with his senior year of high school(this happened January of 2008, so he missed his senior year but he was already going to get held back as he was skipping school and failing his classes) and will be attending college in the Fall.

If you’re wondering why my parents never knew, they suspected it and always asked me and i always said he didnt do drugs because i was keeping my promise. I ended up telling them after many times of them asking because i couldnt lie to them anymore.

You definetly did the right thing… He’s just mad for getting in trouble. Inside, he most likely feels glad, because your parents helped stop it before it REALLY messed up his life. You might have even saved his life! A lot of things can get out of control really fast with drugs. Keep yourself healthy and NEVER use them!

I’m having twins and i was just wondering if there’s any old midwifes tales to find out the gender of twins.
I know the tales for having one child, but not with twins.
I’m sixteen weeks pregnant with twins
I’m 17 weeks w. twins, and I haven’t heard anything different for twins. good luck.

Ok I am freaking out. My ex and I have been in and out of court for years for our 2 children. At one point I owed him money and they put an offset on my taxes, a lien on my car, and garnished my wages. The judge ordered that it stop because while I did owe him for a short period, my kids live with me and he pays nothing. We go back to court 2/17/10 because he owes me over 5000.00 for last year alone. My state return is on hold and my federal went to pay back TANF that he collected when my kids were with him and he lost his job, even though the attorneys have determined that it is his job to pay this since he owes me so much and was collecting support from my paychecks for 15mths because the IV-D people wouldn’t answer the calls from me or my attorney to see why they had not enforced the court order to stop all of this. I got the lien removed in June, 2009, the wage garnishment they finally took care of in September, 2009 but they obviously forgot to inform the IRS because they just took every cent of my return. I can not survive without this money…I am raising our kids with no help from him, he doesn’t even see them anymore; I am a single parent and have twins that are younger than the 2 I have with him (their father pays but he doesn’t make much so its like 50 a week); I am in school full time and just lost my job 3weeks ago because I could no longer afford the child care. Oh btw the ex I am referring to works for the Railroad and makes approx 4000.00 a month… He has shown that he could care less what the court or the lawyers say as he never returned a penny of the support he collected when he didn’t have them, and I am terrified that he will spend the money before anyone opens on Monday and then they will say "oops, our mistake" and order him to pay restitution at 15.00 per week on top of his current support (which he never paid or pays so I have to wait till March to start receiving it thru the wage garnishment. I have never heard of so many court people being involved in a case and then making so many mistakes. My child support modification was pushed back because the IV-D office found 5 or more mail tubs of mail in their basement from March-April of 2009 unopened and made everyone refile like nothing ever happened. I lost money there, lost money when he kept the cs payments he wasn’t supposed to, lost when the judge told him he better pay the support to the clerk until the garnishment took effect, and now they took this. My car is broken, my bills are due, my kids need things and I am a step away from having a breakdown. There should be someone I can call or fax the court order to so that they can reverse the transaction but every number I called is a recording and no one is open….Anyone who has a law degree or a real legal know how PLEASE HELP ME!! Its not fair that they can mess up my life like this and I am expected to … "I don’t even know what they could possibly expect me to do"….Oh and of course, I live in indiana…..
Ok thank you so much…I did get that number and left a message and will definitely call them again Monday (and again and again till they answer and help me…lol) I was so freaked out about them saying it was already direct deposited and figured it meant to him….whew….THANKS SO MUCH!!!
Ok thank you so much…I did get that number and left a message and will definitely call them again Monday (and again and again till they answer and help me…lol) I was so freaked out about them saying it was already direct deposited and figured it meant to him….whew….THANKS SO MUCH!!!

I understand your pain I went through a nasty divorce that lasted for 2 years over three kids and an ex who doesn’t make as much as I do and wanted me to pay child support and have the kids in his full custody and on and on and on. Believe me there is a light at the end of this long dark tunnel, be prepared when you go to court and DOCUMENT DOCUMENT DOCUMENT every single thing that happens with dates/times etc. that stands up in a court more than anything thats going to come out of anyones mouth keep a journal and document every single thing that occurs concerning your ex. As far as your tax refund goes, its the department of child support services for your state that has intercepted your refund, you need to let the judge know at your next court date so that he can order them to give it back to you or order your ex to pay it back if he received it. If he is not paying his child support that needs to be documented and submitted to the child support dept as well yes it takes time for them to enforce the order on his employer but it will happen and then if he doesn’t pay welcome to arrears, and he will pay either through his drivers license being suspended or his tax refund next year. I hope everything works out and if you have an attorney make sure you are noting this all to submit to him/her. Good luck